Negotiated Brief - 'I can't see straight anymore'

Lady Gaga - Just Dance
'I love this record baby,
but I can't see straight anymore'

The idea behind the following ideas was to play on the llegibility; make it hard to read as the song is implying that she 'can't see straight anymore' due to being drunk so it would be hard to read things...




I wasn't sure if the above examples were too complex for a simple statement, so I pursued a very simple idea of just putting the sentence on an angle and visually, I think this is quite effective.

I decided not to use the broken off 'e' because it wasn't really 'adding' anything to the image.





Below is the final that I printed;